Feedback please

I'm disappointed the artistic modififying my crude sketch, I'm looking for creativity applying our detailed description to an image. Not someone altering my art, I could do that myself. I'm looking for patterns, shapes that resemble the construction areas we serve, steel erection, construction crane and concrete columns. I even explained it in my description which has been mostly ignored by 23 artists. Need some improvements or will close campaign.

please give feedback.

thank you

Revised version submitted

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