please sir check my design #27572599, #27572600.. feedback please Thank you

Hello! Please check my design and please send me some comments / feedback / suggestions.
https://www.designcrowd.com/design/27576041
Please help me to build your perfect Brand logo. I am waiting for your reply. I hope you liked it! Thank you!

thank you all! i'll need some days for the feedback from the community. stay tuned.