feedback me on design #35721079 , regards

Kindly check my designs (#35722213, #35722211).

Hello!
I’ve submitted my concept (Entry #35730073) based on your design brief. I truly hope it aligns with your vision..
I’d be really grateful if you could take a moment to share your feedback — and if it feels close to what you're looking for, and rating my work would be truly appreciated.
Thank you so much for your time!

Feedback please. Thanks